孩子开始试着动笔写小作文了，估计错误连篇，但是我的英语很差，请教各路高手能指点一二，不胜感激                          
Send A Card
  Tomorrow is my friend Mimi’s birthday. She invited Joe, Kathy,Lilly and I to her party. Joe sent an elephant like card to Mimi. It is pink. It sparkles too. Beautiful and bright. It seemed to say:”Mimi,I will definitely come to your birthday party.”
   Kathy sent a heart like card. It is as beautiful as a rose. It said:”Happy birthday!”
   Lilly sent a card that looks like a piggy. The piggy is cute. It seemed to say:” I am coming to your birthday party!”
   I sent a card with animation pictures to her. In the card there is a big cake picture. My card said:”Mimi, wish happy birthday to you.” I think my card is picturesque. Mimi will surely like it.

                               Keeping Early Hours  
   Do you get up early every day? Most people do. If you get up early you can do all the things you want to do. If you are an early bird you can use the morning time to remember lots of knowledge. If you get up late, you will miss this precious morning time. It is a big mistake. So we must KEEP EARLY HOURS!

[ 本帖最后由 rei 于 2008-8-22 11:18 编辑 ].

我们小2了，我觉得可以动动笔写点什么。我的要求是无论长短，就像写随笔一样每周写1篇。 最好有人可以指点一下，例如文章中肯定有不地道的中国式英语写法，或者同样想表达一句话怎么写更好，还有语法错误等等。就像语文一样好作文是改出来的，但是偶实在没有这个水平。.

谢谢指点！第四段第一句"amination"是拼写错了，应该是“animation".
第一篇是新概念2Lesson3讲的是一个人因为头痛写明信片把整个假期都搅了，但是孩子说写明信片有什么难的，写了Send A Card。

第二篇是孩子学了新概念2Lesson2讲的是一个人周末要睡到中午才起床，然后就写了一篇Keeping Early Hours 内容其实是孩子的语文老师经常说的话“早起的鸟儿有虫吃”被孩子改了一下，因为孩子说：“早起的虫子不就自找倒霉吗？”

[ 本帖最后由 rei 于 2008-8-22 11:20 编辑 ].